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i do not know how well
i play hide and seek.
i give you one truth,
and keep from you the other;

                            i know who i can tell
                            (even who i want to)
                            but not who i will

                            (that's a lie:
                                               i'll tell no one.)

going to smother it.
in a blanket, like
the candle i cannot let it
outshine.
(every word and i need
a brand new place to hide.)

                            i have friends who
                            do not cower
                            behind the curtain.
                                         they perform,
                                         proud to be sad.
                            i am not.

(i'd take cover under the bed, but
                                the monsters were there first.)

at this point in time
(the one the clock spins around)
my secret is safe with me.

                                                                                    they all are.
:iconameko-shadowsong:

Author's Comments

NaPoWriMo 04/22/09.

(secrets are meant to be kept.)

(erghblarghhhhhno. i don't like it.)

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:iconenshroudedvixen:
(i'd take cover under the bed, but
the monsters were there first.)
Haha, love it :D

--
Rest in peace, Jack, Ciocza Kriszia, Priest Stanislaw :heart:

I'll paint the walls of the palace with your blood. ~Touzokuou

Chuuuuu~ =3
:iconwriters-souls:
-nods to comment above- I like that too...but...that's about all I like about it...I can't even figure out what you're saying...it's just...words strung together this one...there's not...purpose...no concept or point that stands out enough to grip...at least for me...and we know how oddly I read poetry.

--
...if only two thousand miles weren't so far.

...the written world is a far better place than the present...that is until the writer decides to switch things up a bit
:iconameko-shadowsong:
Thanks, that's basically the only part I really like. ^^

--
"You think we're dancing?"
"That's all we've ever done."
.
.
.
You taste like ashes.
:iconameko-shadowsong:
It's about the only part I like two... did you read the comments? For me, half the time, comments are part of the poetry; it's about secrets. Keeping them. One in particular. :shrug:

--
"You think we're dancing?"
"That's all we've ever done."
.
.
.
You taste like ashes.
:iconwriters-souls:
I always read your comments. They're fun!

--
...if only two thousand miles weren't so far.

...the written world is a far better place than the present...that is until the writer decides to switch things up a bit
:iconameko-shadowsong:
Aw, thanks. XD But yeah, it's keeping a secret. it makes sense if you look at it... (I think.) Most of it. (A little more sense if you knew the secret, but, well, that's the point. XD)

--
"You think we're dancing?"
"That's all we've ever done."
.
.
.
You taste like ashes.
:iconwriters-souls:
okay...yeah...now I get it a little better...now it sorta makes sense...interesting detail for that...I like it a little better now...

--
...if only two thousand miles weren't so far.

...the written world is a far better place than the present...that is until the writer decides to switch things up a bit
:iconameko-shadowsong:
I'm glad. XD It's more of a context thing for sure. Like I said, I don't really like it. XD

--
"You think we're dancing?"
"That's all we've ever done."
.
.
.
You taste like ashes.
:iconwriters-souls:
Lol

--
...if only two thousand miles weren't so far.

...the written world is a far better place than the present...that is until the writer decides to switch things up a bit

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